Outline
1. Plan your magazine article about your partner's future success. Your article will have paragraphs similar to the first, second, and third paragraphs of the example in Part 6. Write a topic sentence for each paragraph. Then list facts or examples to support your topic sentences. (If you do not have enough details from your interview, make up some more yourself!)
- Paragraph 1 : what Marry is doing today
1. Plan your magazine article about your partner's future success. Your article will have paragraphs similar to the first, second, and third paragraphs of the example in Part 6. Write a topic sentence for each paragraph. Then list facts or examples to support your topic sentences. (If you do not have enough details from your interview, make up some more yourself!)
- Paragraph 1 : what Marry is doing today
- Topic sentence : Marry is the most famous internist in the world
- Facts or examples : She is popular with president or the most influential people in the world and did a lot of research about the internal diseases and it was very useful for the medical world.
- Topic sentence : Marry has been leader of biology club since he was in Junior High School.
- Facts or examples : She and her team are always won in the biology competition at the national level even the international level even get a scholarship from Harvard University and she continued her study in that college.
- Topic sentence : Marry has two characteristic that helped make her an amazing internist.
- Facts or examples : she is an intelligent person and a hard worker.

Haii gloria.. you have a nice paragraph and I like one by one your story. But can I correct your blog?
ReplyDeleteI think 'I always study and study' should be 'always study' because always already means study and study in paragraph three. Sorry if I wrong..
Good job gloriaπ
Hi Gloria
ReplyDeleteit's a nice paragraph, maybe you should recheck this sentense," she get a scholarship". i think better be a "she got a scholarship".
corect me, if i wrong ya...
correct me, if i'm wrong...
DeleteIn paragraph2 ,"she get a scholarship"should be changed to "got".Your paragraph id great,fighting.
ReplyDeleteStudy and study, do it Glo. I just can't imagine how my life become if I do study and study.
ReplyDeleteWow she is so cool π
ReplyDeleteBut according to me
it will be better if you change" Therefore, it is no surprise that she won this year's The Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine." become " Therefore, it is not a surprise that she won this year Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine. "
Good job π
Btw please comment mine too hehe
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Good paragraph gloo, :)
ReplyDeleteGood job π
ReplyDeleteWow it's so inspiring :)
ReplyDeletethere are some mistaken words. I think "she say that......" should be "she said that...."
It's so inspiring ...
ReplyDeleteHi glo. Nice story you have there. Just want to help you with the grammar. You should write "Don't be afraid to be a succesful person. Don't be afraid of life. Your life is yours." Hope it helps :)
ReplyDeleteHi glo. Nice story you have there. Just want to help you with the grammar. You should write "Don't be afraid to be a succesful person. Don't be afraid of life. Your life is yours." Hope it helps :)
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