Wednesday, October 5, 2016

Marry : The Winner of Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine 2016

Outline
 
1. Plan your magazine article about your partner's future success. Your article will have paragraphs similar to the first, second, and third paragraphs of the example in Part 6. Write a topic sentence for each paragraph. Then list facts or examples to support your topic sentences. (If you do not have enough details from your interview, make up some more yourself!)
     - Paragraph 1 : what Marry is doing today
  • Topic sentence : Marry is the most famous internist in the world
  • Facts or examples : She is popular with president or the most influential people in the world and did a lot of research about the internal diseases and it was very useful for the medical world.
      - Paragraph 2 : the road to success
  • Topic sentence : Marry has been leader of biology club since he was in Junior High School.
  • Facts or examples : She and her team are always won in the biology competition at the national level even the international level even get a scholarship from Harvard University and she continued her study in that college.
      - Paragraph 3 : two characteristics that led to success
  • Topic sentence : Marry has two characteristic that helped make her an amazing internist.
  • Facts or examples : she is an intelligent person and a hard worker.
 

Marry :  The Winner of Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine 2016

   

    Marry is the most famous internist in the world. She is popular with president or the most influential people in the world. In addition, she did a lot of research about the internal diseases and it was very useful for the medical world. Therefore, it is no surprise that she won this year's The Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.

     Marry has been leader of biology club since he was in Junior High School. She and her team are always won in the biology competition at the national level even the international level. After graduating in Senior High School, she get a scholarship from Harvard University and she continued her study in that college. One thing that she say that still keep in my mind, “Don't be afraid to be a successful person. Don't be afraid of life. Your life is yours.” Marry finished her study only two years in the Medical Faculty of Harvard University. One month after graduated, she works in John Hopkins Medicine Baltimore, Maryland, United States of America.  

    Marry has two characteristic that helped make her an amazing internist. First of all, she is an intelligent person. Her intelligence quotient is one of the highest in this world that is 220 same with Leonardo Da Vinci. She always get the first ranking since elementary school until graduated from Harvard University. Second, she is a hard worker. When I visit in her house, she always study and study. She said that study is the important thing to be success. Because of these two important characteristics, Marry can be the best internist in our country even in the world.

12 comments:

  1. Haii gloria.. you have a nice paragraph and I like one by one your story. But can I correct your blog?
    I think 'I always study and study' should be 'always study' because always already means study and study in paragraph three. Sorry if I wrong..

    Good job gloria😊

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  2. Hi Gloria
    it's a nice paragraph, maybe you should recheck this sentense," she get a scholarship". i think better be a "she got a scholarship".

    corect me, if i wrong ya...

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  3. In paragraph2 ,"she get a scholarship"should be changed to "got".Your paragraph id great,fighting.

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  4. Study and study, do it Glo. I just can't imagine how my life become if I do study and study.

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  5. Wow she is so cool 😍

    But according to me
    it will be better if you change" Therefore, it is no surprise that she won this year's The Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine." become " Therefore, it is not a surprise that she won this year Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine. "

    Good job πŸ˜‰
    Btw please comment mine too hehe
    https://dwensblog.wordpress.com/

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  6. Wow it's so inspiring :)
    there are some mistaken words. I think "she say that......" should be "she said that...."

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  7. Hi glo. Nice story you have there. Just want to help you with the grammar. You should write "Don't be afraid to be a succesful person. Don't be afraid of life. Your life is yours." Hope it helps :)

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  8. Hi glo. Nice story you have there. Just want to help you with the grammar. You should write "Don't be afraid to be a succesful person. Don't be afraid of life. Your life is yours." Hope it helps :)

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