Saturday, October 1, 2016

The Next Bank Employee

Outline 
 
1. Plan your composition about an appropriate career for your partner.
  • Finish the sentence about your parner.
I think Dwen would make a good Bank Employee
  • In the chart below, write three reasons why you think so and some supporting points for each.
 

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Main Idea
Good at mathematics
Being logical
Want to working indoors
Supporting Point (s)
Always be active when our ‘mathematics business’ lecturer come to our class and will teach us this subject
She is good at logical thinking like  good at scientific investigations and identifying relationships between different things.
She is a woman that always care about her skin and always make a hand-body lotion to make her skin good.
  • Now, write a short introductory paragraph, like the first paragraph in Part 6
Dwen is my good friend. She is good at mathematics, being logical, and wants to working indoors. Therefore, Dwen would be an amazing bank employee. 

2. Write a topic sentence for each of your main ideas.
  • First of all, Dwen is good at mathematics.  
  • Being logical is the second reason why Dwen would be a good bank employee. 
  • Finally, Dwen is person who want to working indoors.


The Next Bank Employee




      Dwen is my good friend. She is good at mathematics, being logical, and wants to working indoors. Therefore, Dwen would be an amazing bank employee.
     First of all, Dwen is good at mathematics. For example, she always be active when our ‘mathematics business’ lecturer come to our class and will teach us this subject. Furthermore, she always gets good score in ‘mathematics business’ and ‘financial accounting’ subject also. I think she would make an amazing bank employee because of these qualities.
     Being logical is the second reason why Dwen would be a good bank employee. She’s also good at numbers. For instance, she is good at logical thinking likes  good at scientific investigations and identifying relationships between different things. She's also good at understanding complex and abstract ideas.
      Finally, Dwen is person who want to working indoors. She is a woman that always care about her skin and always make a hand-body lotion to make her skin good. Besides that, Dwen very scare about animal. She always scream when she’s meet with animal especially cat and dog. Because of that, she will be better working indoors.

44 comments:

  1. Wow, amazing story Gloria. I believe she will be a good bank employee. How about you? What is your future career?

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    1. Hello man
      Yes, She'll. By the way, I think my future career is to be an entrepreneur. Because I don't like when someone who organize and provide many rules. Thank you to visit my blog and leave your comment. Good luck.

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  2. Nice posting glo. i think the career that good for you is story writer. keep ur best, fighting

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    1. Hi Indomie boy
      Haha, No, I don't. I just want to complete my assignments. Anyway, thank you for your opinion. I'll keep it :D

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  3. Aw aw aw aw, Fantastic. She needs to learn how to work doors as well if she wants to be a great bank employee. I wish all the best to your friend, Dwen.

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    1. Hi, Razak
      Yes, you're right. Thank you and I wish all the best for you too..

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  4. Such an amazing friend you have there. I would like to meet her hehe :D

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    1. Hi, Josua
      Dwen is our classmate
      I think you already meet her before in the class

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  5. wahaha i feel so glad about your story glo :D
    i think it is a good future career
    but I hope i will be the CEO of that bank :D haha

    btw you may recheck some of your words like "I think she would make an amazing bank employee because of these qualities" i think better if you change it to be "I think she would be an amazing bank employee because of these skills"
    over all its so cool
    thank you so much

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    1. Hello my icon, Dwen
      Haha.. You can got it. But the first, you must be the employee first. Thank to your suggestion.

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  6. I think it is very good,fighting,gloria.

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  7. well i think dwen will be a good Bank employee as long as she didn't afraid of people like she was with animal

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    1. Hello Raharja
      No, she doesn't. She not afraid of people. She just scare with animal

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  8. Hello Gloria,
    what an interesting article. It's easy to read and understand. I love the way you describe your friend. It seems that she's really amazing. By the way, perhaps you're willing to recheck some grammatical errors like 'want to working'. I think the word 'want' should be 'wants'. I also want to remind that you haven't given any underline to your topic sentence in each paragraph. Thank you. Have a great day! :)

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    1. Hi, Audrey.. Wow, thank you for your opinion and your suggestion also. Have a great day for you too

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  9. Nice describe glo.but in there have some no clear grammer

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  10. Hi, glo. I think the sentence: 'Being logical is a second reason why Dwen would be a good bank employee.' would be better if you change it this way : 'Being logical is the second reason why Dwen would be a good bank employee.' Great and amazing article :) Keep it up

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    1. Hello Brenda
      Thank to your comment and suggestion. Good luck

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  11. hi glo!
    Love the way you describe about Dwen
    have a nice day:)

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    1. Hello Dina
      Thank you for your comment and good luck

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  12. You know her very well. No doubt you two are bestfriend. Keep writing!

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    1. Hi Vinvin. Haha, you're right. She is my best friend also. Okay, Vinvin

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  13. wow , its great glo :) I trust dwen can !

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    1. Hello Neng. Yeah, you're right. I believe Dwen can be success also

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  14. Hi Gloria!
    Good paragraph, you have a good friend who have good skill. I think that's a good career for your friend.

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    1. Hello Tian. Yes, you're right. I think that's the best career for her also. Thank you for your comment, yeah

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  15. It is a good dream.I hope it can realize future.fighting

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    1. Hello Tang Yi
      Yes, you can. I believe that you can realize your dream also

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  16. Ya,I agree with you. Dwen is a good person

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  17. Hi Glo :)
    It's an amazing article. I like the ways you describe about Dwen.

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    1. Hello Yulia
      Thank you for visit and comment my blog. Have a nice day, yeah

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  18. hi Glo
    Amazing article. I have same think with you about Dwen.

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    1. Hi, Yoshua
      Thank to comment my blog. Of course, because Dwen is amazing people. hehe

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  19. Haii my best friend, it's amazing paragraph. I think nothing wrong in your blog and I agree about Dwen because she is a smart girl☺

    Good job gloria!!

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    1. Hello my best friend in this world. hehe. Thank you for visit and comment to my blog. Good luck and keep fighting :)

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